能帮我看看自己翻译的英文对不对吗?谢谢!

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能麻烦一下大家帮我看看翻得对不对吗？以下是中文版和英文版，谢谢～

大家好！欢迎收看＠＠转珠秀！在这一集当中，我们将教会您如何在手机游戏“神魔之塔”，又或者你可以称它为『神魔之塔』中称霸天下
首先，我们欢迎主持人＞＠＠＠ 登场！
＠：『哈啰！大家好～我是主持人＠＠，这位是副主持人喵以及特别来宾google小姐』
喵：『哈啰呗喵喵喵喵喵』
g：『欢迎使用google浏览器』
＠：『好的，首先，在你开始体验游戏“神魔之塔”之前，你需要准备一些东西，像是……..』
g：『一只内存容量充足的手机，一包洋芋片，一本bl，一本bl，以及一本bl』

喵：『为何只是玩个手机游戏需要准备这么多东西呢？ 』
@：『噢！好问题，喵，也许有很多观众会有跟你相同的疑问，但我要说的是−当你正在下载一个容量约424MB的app时，无疑会需要很多时间，而基于本人我“绝不浪费时间”的人生信条，所以我们需要这些东西来消化掉这段时间.........』

Hello everyone! Welcome to the @@ turn bead show! In this program we will teach you how to dominate the world in themobile game "Tower of Saviors” Or you could call it “shen－mo－chih－t'a”
First of all, we welcome the host－ @@debut!
@: "Hello everyone ~ I'm a host @@, and he is the second special host Mr. Meow ，and the
special guest Miss Google “
喵: "Hello ! meow~ meow~ meow~”
g: "Welcome to use Google Chrome."
@: "Well, first, before you begin to experience the game" Tower of Saviors, "you need to prepare something like ...... .."
g: "a memory capacity sufficient phone, a packet of potato chips, a bl, a bl, and a bl”
喵: "Why just play themobile game need to prepare so many things? “
@: "Oh! Good question, Mr. Meow, maybe there are many viewers have the same question like you, but I would say that - when you are downloading a app which has a capacity of about 424MB， will undoubtedly need a lot of time, but I based on the life credo"never a wste of time, ", so we need these things to digest this time ………"
@：『噢！哈啰～胆小鬼』
@：『这是我的猫“胆小鬼”很可爱吧？哈哈哈哈哈～羡慕对吧？可惜你们摸不到～』
@：『好的，现在神魔之塔的安装已经完成了～现在我们终于可以开始游戏了！首先，你需要..........』
闹钟声

Meow ~
@: "Oh! Hello ~ Coward. "
@: "This is my cat,Coward very cute, right? Ha ha ha ha ha ~ envy, right? Unfortunately, you can not touch it ~ “ @: "Okay, now installed" Ghost Tower "has been completed ~ and now we can finally start the game! First, you need .......... “
[Alarm Sound〕

Answer 1

1. First of all, we welcome the host－ @@debut!
=> Let's welcome the MC:XXX
2. "Hello everyone ~ I'm a host @@, and he is the second special host Mr. Meow ，and the
special guest Miss Google “
=> "Hello everyone! I'm your MC XX, and this is your special host Mr. Meow, and here our special guest Miss Google."
3. g: "a memory capacity sufficient phone, a packet of potato chips, a bl, a bl, and a bl”
=> "A a mobilephone with sufficient memory capacity, a packet of potato chips, a bl book/ manga, a bl book/ manga, and a bl book/ manga” (如果你这里的BL指的是小说或者漫画。）
4. 喵: "Why just play themobile game need to prepare so many things? “
=> Why do you need so many things for just playing a mobile game?
5. maybe there are many viewers have the same question like you
=> maybe there are a lot of viewers who have the same question just like you.
6. when you are downloading a app which has a capacity of about 424MB， will undoubtedly need a lot of time, but I based on the life credo"never a wste of time, ", so we need these things to digest this time ………"
=> when you are down loading an app which takes you 424 MB, you will undoubtedly need a lot of time. Based on my life credo "never waste time", we will need to do something.

纯属交流，不过有的翻译..你找的机器吧..

Answer 2

已经做出了修改：
First of all, welcome our host－ @@debut!
@: "Hello everyone ~ I'm the host @@, and she is the second special host Meow ，and thespecial guest Miss Google “
喵: "Hello ! meow~ meow~ meow~”
g: "Welcome to use Google Chrome."
@: "Well, first, before you begin to play the game" Tower of Saviors, "you need to prepare somethinglike ...... .."
g: "a sufficient memory capacity in your phone, a packet of potato chips, a bl, a bl, and abl”
喵: "Why playinga mobile game need to prepare so many things? “
@: "Oh! Good question, Mr. Meow, maybe there are many viewers have thesame question like you, but I would say that - when you are downloading a appwhich has a capacity of about 424MB，undoubtedly you need a lot of time, butbasically according to the credo of my life "never a waste of time, ", we need these things to do something for this time ………"本回答被提问者和网友采纳

Answer 3

Or you could call it “shen－mo－chih－t'a”

不符合语法，把这句话括号起来吧。or去掉，you could also call it。。。
"Why just play themobile game need to prepare so many things? “

改成why we need preparing so many things to play the game

maybe there are many viewers have the same question like you

viewers 改成audits who，likeyou 去掉，很重复

will undoubtedly need a lot of time, but I based on the life credo"never a wste of time, ",so。。。

undoubtedly it will 。。。。，I去掉，so去掉

Answer 4

可以说没神魔错误，满分100分的话90分以上是稳拿了，鸡蛋挑骨头的话：
喵: "Hello ! meow~ meow~ meow~” 应翻译为：喵：『哈啰！ 喵~ 喵~ 喵』（你的翻译喵：『哈啰呗喵喵喵喵喵』感觉不知道这是在向谁打招呼，倒不是太大问题，但考试容易被扣1分，岁数大的老师会看不懂何为“哈啰呗”）
Mr. Meow 应翻译称 喵小姐 更保险些。（@: "Oh! Good question, Mr. Meow,。。。）
（我是楼主的每个词都看啦，有2个不懂的还查了词典）LZ的翻译已经很好了，希望我的回答能帮你英语口语学习上更上层楼。

Answer 5

没看出有什么问题